1. 关注文章想要“传达的要点”(take-home message)

文章的核心信息是什么?

读完你的论文后，想让读者记住的最重要的事情是什么?

你能否在一分钟内向同事描述论文的核心信息?

你是否可以用3-5个关键要点概述文章?

能否用一句话总结你的文章?

你能用图形的形式表达核心信息吗?

2. 使用清晰，简洁的文字

保持简短的句子。每句话写一个重要点。

避免不必要的重复。多使用主动语态，而不是被动语态。

“The expression of X was determined …” = Passive voice ✘

“We determined the expression of X …” = Active voice✓

句子当中的主语和谓语尽量靠近

“Glucose [subject], which is made during photosynthesis from … , is [verb] a simple sugar.”✘

“Glucose [subject] is [verb] a simple sugar that is made during photosynthesis from … ”✓

尽量避免名词长字符串

“XX hospital established a medical services efficiency evaluation index system.”✘

“XX hospital established an index system that evaluated the efficiency of their medical services.”✓

3. 讲故事

像讲故事一样娓娓道来

你为什么决定做这个实验?→怎么做的?→发现了什么?→你的发现有什么意义?使用路标来指引读者阅读故事

“In experiment 1, we showed that XXX. To elucidate the mechanism for this, we then …

“不要让读者不知道你是如何得出假设/结论的

Example:

Sodium suppresses podocyte apoptosis; therefore, since X and sodium have similar chemical structures, the purpose of this study was to investigate the anti-apoptotic activity of X in podocytes.

Revision: Sodium suppresses podocyte apoptosis. X has a similar chemical structure to sodium. Therefore, we hypothesised that X would also suppress apoptosis in podocytes.

修改后的版本给出了作者如何得出这一假设的逻辑循序渐进的说明。